Tuesday 23rd

We went to Colleridge today to ask the year 12 students our questionnairs, we decided to split our team of four in two and did 1/2 of the room each and collaborated our findings at the end. i worked with Matt L, i interviewed while he wrote down their answers. After we had interviewed them we colaborated our info and had to leave because Nick was taking their lesson.

when we got back to long road later that day we were given feedback on our articles from students in the year 12 group and from Nick

Nicks main points on my article were;

• A couple of terms i use are a little out of place and sound odd



• I don't explain what Vimeo is and don't give a URL for it



• I mention Simon using a website but don't say what site



• Using Jeffrey Lewis could be a better example then David Gauntlett

Student Feedback;

• Split it into smaller paragraphs



• Give more examples



• Use a better title

This feed back is quite usefull, but a lot of it i was already aware of because my article is only half finnished due to not having replys from Simon and David for a while. I will deffinately consider using Jeffrey Lewis in the article (this is somthing i hadn't previously thought of) and a new title was somthing that was obviously needed.